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We stood at the very highest peak,
And looking down, you started to scoff,
"Baby, you're so perfect,
Why don't you jump off?"
I tried to protest,
"I don't have wings,
I cannot fly!"
But you laughed and pushed me anyway,
Maybe you hoped I would die.
And then I was falling fast,
At a most dizzying pace,
Yet all I could see
Was your disapproving face.
And then I hit the ground,
And I hit so hard
I was left with nothing,
Just a little shard.
And I lay there,
My little glass heart broken,
And all I could remember
Was the last words you'd spoken.
You said, "My dear,
It pains me to see you like this"
But I refused to accept
That one last kiss.
My heart was begging
For just one more chance
But my feet ached
And they would not dance.
So I picked up the broken pieces,
Gathered them together,
And I said my last goodbye.
Goodbye forever.
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I have no clue what inspired this or where it came from. I just made it up.

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:icondnmph:
Thats a really great poem, good lil metaphore thing there about the falling and such, I really like it, great emotion and such, good job :)

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We are here on Earth to fart around. Don't let anybody tell you any different!
:iconemocinderella:
Thank you! I wrote it at like 2:30 am this morning..lol
:icondnmph:
Haha, nice, well, from my limited experiance, the poems that wake u up/keep u up, end up being pretty good :P

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We are here on Earth to fart around. Don't let anybody tell you any different!
:iconfrozensnake:
Awwww..its really sweet and its really good =)

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"Love is like the most beautiful flower, a couple always need to take care of it..but even the prettiest one dies at all.."
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Thanks. Though it wasn't supposed to be sweet really, it was sad. And painful.
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its good and it comes across right on.
:iconillsm:
oh my....that was really sad....it almost brought a tear.
:iconemocinderella:
Yes! My goal as a poet is fufilled. I shall die in peace now.

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