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I promise Ill break your heart by *Emocinderella:iconEmocinderella:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Open


"I promise I'll break your heart..."
I whispered to him
In the dark of the backseat,
"You can't trust a girl like me..."
I was just lonely
It didn't mean a thing
"I'm only seventeen...."
He didn't mind,
We'll just have a good time
"So unsure...so naive.."
But I closed my eyes
And I made believe...

I pretended I cared
I pretended I was beautiful
And I pretended I was with you
Instead of this....George, Bill, or Joe?
Does it really matter?
I'll disappear tomorrow.
I warned him not to try to find me...
"I promise I'll break your heart"
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It's an interesting thing being broken, isn't it?

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~dragondreamzero May 20, 2008, 9:54:15 AM
wow. that is good. i like it. i agree.

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~allaricdeschain May 20, 2008, 12:56:29 PM
if only they made emotional glue...and it was easier to find

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~Xjamie-chaosX May 20, 2008, 2:59:16 PM
that is amazing!
i love this

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the girls a straight up hustler :/
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~mellowghost May 20, 2008, 3:28:24 PM
Hmmm.... a social experiment?
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~v-8 May 20, 2008, 4:03:54 PM
Damn, chalk up another one for you Cindy. Your writing is killer, and I mean this in a good way, but this is just a venomous poem.

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~ksmsoccer89 May 20, 2008, 4:11:06 PM
im not quite sure what to think of this. i like the beginning but i think it kinda falls out at the end. still a good poem though.

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~hopelesswithhope May 20, 2008, 4:40:48 PM
Wow, that's deep. As in, there's a deep meaning here. It is a very strange thing, being broken. But without brokenness, how can you feel the highs of completeness? I think this sounds excellent. =D
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*Emocinderella May 23, 2008, 6:57:24 AM
Yeah, I suppose I was doing some serious thinking when I wrote this.....just about the reasons for one's actions and the consequences that follow, and just about love, of course. You're right, a lot of times you have to be broken to learn. Thank you. ^_^
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*Emocinderella May 23, 2008, 6:59:12 AM
lol....you could say that....
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