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I won't say a word by *Emocinderella:iconEmocinderella:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen > Free & Blank Verse


I dressed up my prettiest
And avoided your eyes.
You never danced with me
And I never said goodbye

So much of me wants to say....

Say what I'm not allowed to say
How I begin to hope
Everytime you start to look my way
I do my best just to breathe
But, darling, don't you know
How you break me?

If you love her...
(I won't say a word)
If you forget me...
(Because I won't be heard)

I won't promise
I won't cry
You never danced with me
And I never said goodbye.
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Author's Comments

Ok, so I'm definitely liking what I did with this, but I still, (meticulous me,) think that it could be improved. So, it is still possibly going to change. I just think I could have put more emotion into it....I just don't know how...

oh and the real title is

If you love her (I won't say a word)

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~alimayne Dec 1, 2008, 6:40:13 PM
So emotive and simply heartbreaking. Beautiful <3
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*Emocinderella Dec 1, 2008, 9:29:11 PM
aw why thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
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~sexytoaster Sep 5, 2008, 1:48:44 PM
That was beautifully written, a very nice read. :)

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~Beneath-the-Leaves May 23, 2008, 7:32:54 PM
I love the beginning of this;I can definitely feel the conflict that the narrator (I guess, would that be you? Or whoever, I suppose) is feeling, torn and hopeful at the same time.

*heart**heart**heart**heart**heart**heart*
*heart**heart**heart**heart**heart**heart*
*heart**heart**heart**heart**heart**heart*

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*Emocinderella May 26, 2008, 5:21:23 PM
Thank you. Yes, I am the narrator, and yes, you got it exactly right.....torn and hopeful.....
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*b1gfan May 17, 2008, 10:46:16 PM
I won't promise
I won't cry
You never danced with me
And I never said goodbye.

Excellent...very very moving
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~hopelesswithhope Apr 24, 2008, 6:20:42 PM
Yes, I think it's great as is. It's absolutely awesome. =D
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*Emocinderella Apr 28, 2008, 1:46:46 PM
awh, well thank you! ^_^
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