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Stranger Still by *Emocinderella:iconEmocinderella:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Romantic > Teen or Young Romance > Open


Same places as we were before,
But it's so different.

Do you remember?
I don't.

I don't remember a face like yours.
     Stranger,
                  stranger,
                              and stranger still.
It all grows dark with time

&&you were never mine.

                              And silently,
          we remember

(We  were  in  love)

How could we forget?
When those unfamiliar eyes
Looked upon me
With something other than coldness

Don't say anything

I can't hear your voice anymore.

But your cold touch won't hurt me now
So hold me for only a moment
Because I'm slipping away.
I am not who I was
And you are stranger still.
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Author's Comments

Inspired by last night, being around my ex. And it wasn't upsetting, just a little awkward. I just observed how different we both are, and how occasionally we'd be like, "hey, remember the time that this happened?" and we'd both laugh but no one else knew what we were talking about. And then silently I would think about what else had happened back then, like that we were in love, and wondered if he remembered those things too. And yet, I can hardly picture those things anymore, because we're so different now. I know, its confusing.

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~ksmsoccer89 Dec 3, 2007, 12:18:56 PM
this is a nice poem. raw emotion and feeling. its good to write these things out. ex's are very awkward and i know what you mean when there are those moments and thoughts and what not. but yeah good write. :)

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Life can't get much better than this. Appreciate what you have while you have it.
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~RichofChaos Dec 4, 2007, 4:54:53 PM
awesome feeling in this.

simply put:

i like it.

--
"its coursing its way through everything..."
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*Emocinderella Dec 5, 2007, 9:03:26 AM
yay, thank you! ^_^
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~ksmsoccer89 Dec 5, 2007, 9:06:49 AM
youre welcome

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Life can't get much better than this. Appreciate what you have while you have it.
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~xxorpheusxx Dec 22, 2007, 10:33:33 PM
love the structure of everything, it realy changes everything up, and the story is told great :hug:

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"Rain say's it in her own, Jaws like way"- My amazing Hippy Sister :headbang:

If you're addicted to glomping people then add this to your Signature...:glomp:
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*Emocinderella Dec 25, 2007, 6:28:18 AM
^_^ thank you...I'm glad you liked it! :hug:
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~ryu-son Jan 8, 2008, 5:08:02 AM
Great job! I love the feel of it, and the "Stranger, stranger, stranger still".
It's got a good story behind it too. I can't say I relate exactly, but I know how it feels! :hug:

--
And in the daylight we can hitchhike to Maine
I hope that someday I'll see without these frames
And in the daylight I don't pick up my phone
'Cause in the daylight anywhere feels like home
-Matt and Kim
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