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I think about writing about stars
and empty soda bottles
and anything unrelated to you

but then you and your whirlpool eyes...
my pretty stars are space junk
and my empty soda bottles are trash.

ii.
i pointed out orion in the sky.
you took my hand and
asked me why it mattered
over the clinking sound of breaking china
or cheap metal maybe,
something as insignificant as my heart.

my fingers curled into fists,
as i realized you had no clue how you bruised me

iii.
I love every bit of you
your eyes, your hair, the shape of your jaw
and your nose and ears
the things people notice when they first see you

your fingers, your natural rhythm,
the way you pick up little things
and turn them over in your hands.
the things nobody notices but me

love makes everything precious treasure.
makes trivial objects, sounds, and memories
suddenly wonderful.

how you squint when you smile,
almost hiding those eyes i love
and your lips twist up like they used to
right before you kissed me.

iv.
if i were to collapse,
and they were to take me to the hospital,
the doctors would cut me open
and gape at mess inside.
they'd wonder who'd been taking stabs at my heart
for the past two years...
but why did it matter
whether i had a whole heart or not

they couldn't pry the empty bottle from my hands.

v.
there was the time though
when you treasured me,
and I sparkled brighter than the space junk stars
and you collected the empty soda bottles.
i wrote poetry for you
in permanent marker on the empty, empty bottles.
you tucked the falling strands of hair behind my ear
and promised me today, tomorrow, forever.

there was that once
when you turned everything trivial
into something miraculous.
Don't those little ' poetic' things seem ridiculous if without the one you love?

how can i appreciate anything without being loved?

love makes everything precious treasure.
makes trivial objects, sounds, and memories
suddenly wonderful.
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:iconviolethearts77:
violethearts77 Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2010   Writer
wow. that was truly beautiful... and sad. :sniff sniff:
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:iconemocinderella:
Emocinderella Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much
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Andry-a-qui Featured By Owner Oct 23, 2010
very nice!
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:iconemocinderella:
Emocinderella Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much.
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DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
they couldn't pry the empty bottle from my hands.

i love that you made that line stand alone, made it more powerful. that line hurt the deepest. this is beautiful.
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:iconemocinderella:
Emocinderella Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
me too.
would you mind telling me, do you think the last stanza makes it clear why the whole bottle/star thing is significant?
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DamagedHomewrecker Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
yes i think it does
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misunderstoodsoul1 Featured By Owner May 9, 2009
this is great, i love it, so true, and beautiful
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:iconemocinderella:
Emocinderella Featured By Owner May 10, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Oh thank you so much!
:hug:
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:iconmisunderstoodsoul1:
misunderstoodsoul1 Featured By Owner May 11, 2009
yo welcome
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:iconsir-plokji:
sir-plokji Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2009
true :nod:
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despairinspired Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I'm forever trying to point constellations out to people...
Never seem to find them cos of the clouds and light pollution.

Anyways. I like this. The imagery is particularly powerful. For some reason the bottles remind me of Bukowski, he was forever turning everyday things and events into poetic devices.
Nice work. :)
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:iconemocinderella:
Emocinderella Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
^_^ yeah me too.
Thanks! Hmm I've never heard of him...I'll have to go google it or something. haha.
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despairinspired Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
He was a bit of an odd man, bit of a drunk lol. His poem A Shoelace sticks out particularly.
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:iconemocinderella:
Emocinderella Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
lol that's cool. I'll have to look it up.
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ejectionletter Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
nice symmetry.

&orion is always my favorite constellation.
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:iconemocinderella:
Emocinderella Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Me too! It's the one I can always find!
&&thanks! :hug:
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Heavyrainfall Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2009
Do you just look around the house and think up ideas?
Oh I feel like heartbreak today *Looks around* The empty bottles will be my tools in which I show the pain!
What's next Babe?
The toaster that makes Heart broken toast... Hey I like that Idea BTW <3 Miss you
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Well...in all honesty, after I finished drinking my bottle of sprite, I looked through it at the bottom and thought it looked kind of like a star...

I thought about how I could write about that.

"I think about writing about stars and empty soda bottles..."
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Heavyrainfall Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2009
Nice.... You do find inspiration in random places huh?
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Jess-xx Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2009
lovely
merrr its funny, isnt it, how much pain love causes us yet when we have the opportunity we cant let it go.
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Feb 13, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Oh I know just what you mean! No matter how much it hurts you, something makes you keep holding on. Hope, probably. False hope.
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Jess-xx Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2009
And telling people you still are trying to work things out just makes you feel pathetic because you know all is lost in reality but something makes you hold on despite everything that has happened.
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
aww....yeah...exactly...sad.
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SicadaLemmingMan Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2009
Nice. I loved the concept completely.
I also love how recently you'v been sticking to your style,
but the pieces have been slightly different each time, thats where the real talent lyes..
I love how YOU turned something as trivial as empty bottles
and such, into creative poetry. Very well written miss Joy.. ;>
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Yay...
^_^
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:iconsicadalemmingman:
SicadaLemmingMan Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2009
lol
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ProtoRepublic Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2009
I love the contrasts you've made. Wonderful piece here. :)
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Feb 12, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. ^_^
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