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On the 26th, I carried 26 cents in my pocket and thought of 26 reasons why I love you.

When I turned 16, I asked you to kiss me 16 times, one for each year.
The last two had to be the best because the past two years with you had been the best out of all my sixteen.

On the ninth, I only allowed myself to cry nine tears and think of nine reasons that you should still be mine, nine reasons that we belonged together.
I couldn't find the nine breaths of air to say it.

Thirteen people told me it was all going to be okay.
Thirteen people lied.

Five months later I wrote you five letters telling you how much you meant to me and only got five words in return
"Things are better this way."

The 26th came around again and I had no change in my pockets and only half of my 26 reasons to love you. I held twenty pills in my hand and shook countless shivers because it all felt so wrong and the numbers weren't matching up.
The phone rang four times but yours was the one voice I wanted to hear.

It was the 26th, and I couldn't think of a single reason to go on without you.
Don't freak out, it's fiction. I just liked the concept.
And I realized how OCD this made me look after I wrote it.

^_^
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LastMagic Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009
No, not at all.
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
good. ^_^
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LastMagic Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
This is totally my style. Great concept, good execution.
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, but ...isn't it too emo for you?
^_^
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ejectionletter Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
It was the 26th, and I couldn't think of a single reason to go on without you.

<3, somehow nothing ever adds up right in love.
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
^_^
exactly.
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lethelen Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
God, scared me for a minute there- I was actually wondering if I should be worried about you! Very well written, good job!
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Lol, hey atleast someone cared enough to worry, lol! ^_^ thanks, i'm glad you liked it.
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Away-From-Me Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008
I love the numbery thing, don't ever doubt it.

This:

"Five months later I wrote you five letters... and only got five words in return 'Things are better this way.'"

made me feel like I'd just gotten dumped, so kudos to you. :D
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Yay, thank you!
Yeah...I felt dumped too...not a fun feeling.
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red-head-dreamer Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
loooove it..
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
^_^
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red-head-dreamer Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009
bite
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
ow! You're supposed to hug your friends or bake cakes for them, or steal their boyfriends, not bite them!
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red-head-dreamer Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2009
i do all of the above

I also use magic on you.

bhaha
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
gah!
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diodood Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2008
Great poem ^^
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
^_^ yay I'm glad you like it!
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x-SilentScreams-x Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
The idea of OCD that this sparks only makes it that much more interesting. It builds the character in a way that is probably better than if you had written the same story without all of the numbers.

I like the way you built the relationship, tore it to shreds, and continued the process of her heartbeat for him and against him. Beautiful work.
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! Yeah, I also count my steps sometimes.
It does add more to it, I think.
And isn't that how a lot of relationships go? You work and work to build it up then have it torn to shreds.
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x-SilentScreams-x Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Very welcome. :)

Yes, it is... and it's sad that it has to be that way. But, no matter how hard we try, it always seems to happen that way.
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SicadaLemmingMan Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2008
oh whatever, we're all a bit Oh See Dee ocd OCD OCD..lol
i loved it, very very very creative.
This reminded me of that song "Calendar Girl" lol
with the idea of using measurment concepts, to make a point..
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Emocinderella Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
^_^ good, I'm glad you liked it.
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meeden Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2008
it's brilliant - it's like a cliff hanger - a nice blend of things and numbers make this all add up to perfect! :butterfly:
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